Little Bottles
Sun Jan 09, 2005 8:46 pm
Erm... I hope it's okay to post this.
It's the first poetry I've written in awhile, and I'm a bit rusty.
Little Bottles
I just want to forget about
What happened yesterday
I've got to move on with my life
I should be on my way
It hurts too much, I cannot stand
I can't get up or walk
I grope around and grab the key
Attempt to find the lock
I try to sleep off all my pain
But sleep cannot allay
This hurt I feel. I want to scream
I want to run away
The bottles keep my thoughts at bay
They drive her from my mind
The bitterness that they contain
Sole solace I can find
I drink the bottle quickly
I smash it on the floor
The little bottles free my soul
I want to think no more.
It's the first poetry I've written in awhile, and I'm a bit rusty.
Little Bottles
I just want to forget about
What happened yesterday
I've got to move on with my life
I should be on my way
It hurts too much, I cannot stand
I can't get up or walk
I grope around and grab the key
Attempt to find the lock
I try to sleep off all my pain
But sleep cannot allay
This hurt I feel. I want to scream
I want to run away
The bottles keep my thoughts at bay
They drive her from my mind
The bitterness that they contain
Sole solace I can find
I drink the bottle quickly
I smash it on the floor
The little bottles free my soul
I want to think no more.
Sun Jan 09, 2005 11:37 pm
wow, I really like it!!^__^
It seems that some of the phrases could be broken down a bit more, but other than that, I love it!^^* very well portrayed! awesome job^^*
It seems that some of the phrases could be broken down a bit more, but other than that, I love it!^^* very well portrayed! awesome job^^*
Mon Jan 10, 2005 12:57 am
*gape*
A...little....rusty..?!
That may well be the best poem I have heard since....I don't know when!
A...little....rusty..?!
That may well be the best poem I have heard since....I don't know when!
Mon Jan 10, 2005 12:57 pm
Wow, that was awestome... you do my favorite kind of poetry (as well as the one I usually write!)
And belive it or not - I forgot the title of the post and assumed the first four parts were about Eowyn. Can you belive me!?
Eowyn alter-ego: Made sense to me!
Now it's.... Eomer. Because... well... oh don't make me SAY this!
Eowyn alter-ego: Because Eomer drank heavily, I swear. He was staggering outta the houses of healing like a tipsy boar...
*cough* Erm... whatever.
And belive it or not - I forgot the title of the post and assumed the first four parts were about Eowyn. Can you belive me!?
Eowyn alter-ego: Made sense to me!
Now it's.... Eomer. Because... well... oh don't make me SAY this!
Eowyn alter-ego: Because Eomer drank heavily, I swear. He was staggering outta the houses of healing like a tipsy boar...
*cough* Erm... whatever.
Tue Jan 11, 2005 12:32 am
Eo wrote:Wow, that was awestome... you do my favorite kind of poetry (as well as the one I usually write!)
And belive it or not - I forgot the title of the post and assumed the first four parts were about Eowyn. Can you belive me!?
Eowyn alter-ego: Made sense to me!
Now it's.... Eomer. Because... well... oh don't make me SAY this!
Eowyn alter-ego: Because Eomer drank heavily, I swear. He was staggering outta the houses of healing like a tipsy boar...
*cough* Erm... whatever.
Hmm... *re-reads* It does sort of seem like Eowyn.
Thanks for the comments, guys.
