Broken Poem (My poem)
Wed Oct 06, 2004 9:18 pm
Well, i've finally decided to start submitting my poetry, even though I'm kind of new at it. 
Here's my latest. (I wrote it at about 1:30 A.M last night.
Broken Poem
Like pieces of a broken poem
my life falls down around me
Wishing I could find a home
where loving ones surround me
Trying to read the faded words
from the pages of a dusty tome
Shards pierce the hearts of flying birds
from pieces of a broken poem
Here's my latest. (I wrote it at about 1:30 A.M last night.Broken Poem
Like pieces of a broken poem
my life falls down around me
Wishing I could find a home
where loving ones surround me
Trying to read the faded words
from the pages of a dusty tome
Shards pierce the hearts of flying birds
from pieces of a broken poem
woah
Thu Oct 07, 2004 1:00 am
I like that. That's a real true poem. Your art is magnificent!
Sun Oct 10, 2004 8:29 pm
Thank you very much. ^.^
Fri Oct 15, 2004 12:50 am
I really liked the visualization your poem created. I think thats one of the prime ideas of creating poetry, to not only allow the person to read the poem, but to invigorate all the senses('cept maybe smell 
) and allow for the creation of a scene rather than just a few lines. You really did well with this poem, I think it could be longer, but regardless, it's awesome 
Perhaps you would like to try out for PinkInk(PPT's official news paper)? It's looking for writers right now and you're pretty darn good!
) and allow for the creation of a scene rather than just a few lines. You really did well with this poem, I think it could be longer, but regardless, it's awesome
Perhaps you would like to try out for PinkInk(PPT's official news paper)? It's looking for writers right now and you're pretty darn good!