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Like the Swallow
Summary: Why does Edgar so distrust Shadow? How did the Empire make Setzer a rich man? What happened to Banon at the end of the world? Through the eyes of Marial, survivor of Doma, are the answers to these questions and more.


Story is now at:

http://www.angelfire.com/freak/tharkun/swallow.html

(Not going to bloody my hands at FFN. You know how much Leo/Kefka there is there? Also, it will be divided into individual chapters, but for now I've accomplished my mission to evade the mods' wrath.)

Me likes! Not only did you use the best Final Fantasy as a back drop, you kept a good connection between both the characters in the game and the ones in your fanfic! Awesome.

Aaaand the second chapter! Would that I could write as quickly as Fernwithy.

If I ever call Kefka female. let me know. I'm almost certain to slip up in that department. It's just something about the phrase "My sweet little magic user."

EDIT: Story now hyperlinked. Changes made to the last two paragraphs, especially Marial's choice of words. Bleh. Anyway, I need constructive criticism more than anything.