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*fade in* Light Defraction? *fade out* *fade in* I just call it a sun set! *fade out* *repeat*.

Sorry for all the *'s.

Blazing Beauty

(Subject to change...was trying to go for the whole Sleeping Beauty angle since the sun goes to sleep kinda...um....yeah)

Judges, comment/rate each subtext and choose 5 people to eliminate.

Judge’s Notes: Overall, great work. I had a tough time rating these and especially choosing people to eliminate. You can take my comments about your subtexts with a grain of salt for all I care, but those are just my opinions, so please don’t take it personally. One more thing, none of the subtexts really stood out to me as ‘WOW’, most of you seemed to play it safe. At this point of the game, that is fine, but as we progress and there are less people, your subtexts are going to have to stand out more.

Twizzler0171---The Dawn of a new Night
I like it, and I think it does go well with the set. The word ‘The’ in my opinion isn’t really necessary, but the subtext is still good.

Kalathalan---Elegant Radiance
I like the word Elegant. I think the set has an elegant feel to it. The radiance part is good too. Good job!

Amarise---Fading Glory
Nice! It works great with this set and is the perfect length.

JellyFish72--- Turning everything it touches to gold...
I don’t think this subtext really works with the set. First off, there isn’t that much gold in the picture so the ‘everything’ part doesn’t really work. Also the ‘…’ at the end isn’t a good addition I think. It makes it look like it is going to fade into something.

Livin_in_the_shadow--- A grave for the blaze, how radiant!
It doesn’t work for this set. I could see ‘A grave for the blaze’ working by itself or even ‘how radiant!’ working by itself…but not together. Also, the exclamation point at the end just doesn’t work for me, sorry.

.:Requiem:.---Fire bathes the Western skies
I like it, very poetic. It fits in with the set well, in my opinion. Well done!

Watericesage---Crimson Evening
Nice, suits the set well. Excellently done!

(*Dranzer*)---The end of the beginning...
Hmm, I’m not sure about this one. I think it would be better if you took out the ‘…’, like I said to JellyFish and changed the ‘the’ to an ‘a’. So the subtext would read ‘The end of a beginning’

Maryann--- Sleeping Beauty
Not sure about this one. I see where you are coming from, but I don’t see it working on this signature. Maybe if you change it around to something like ‘A Beauty Going To Sleep’, or something like that?

Sir_Michael---A Sun's Bedtime
I don’t think it really fits with the mood of the set. The set has a very elegant mood, and this just seems very kiddy for lack of a better word. I think that this subtext would work better on a set that has a cartoon sun setting.

Ledi---As sets the sun... ...so rises the moon. "(to be put above and below the "sunset" wording. ^^)"
I like the way you placed the subtext, but it isn’t the best fit for this set. It just doesn’t seem to work because the moon isn’t even in the set. That is just my opinion.

Maniac---Red clouds at night ... my delight
I like the subtext itself, but the way you put it isn’t the best. I think the subtext would be much better with a *fade* instead of ‘…’.

Stephanie---A new day has come
I don’t understand your subtext. The signature is of a sunset, meaning the day is ending, not a new day beginning.

Twinkle---Such a perfect way to end a day...
Just like with Dranzer and Jellyfish, the ‘…’ don’t really work. But I like the subtext, it is nice

Lionheartwitty---Dawn of the Night
Great subtext! I was hoping someone would do something like that when I saw the set!

DM---Sunny Days
I don’t think that it fits that well. It is the end of he day, so I just don’t see the subtext looking too good on the signature.

Hellyer---*fade in* Light Defraction? *fade out* *fade in* I just call it a sun set! *fade out* *repeat*
This seems too happy and bubbly, for lack of a better word. Kind of like with Sir_Michael, this subtext just doesn’t fit in with the set.

The_dog_god---Blazing Beauty
It is good, it fits well with the set and is a good length.

Eliminate:
It was difficult to choose but Stephanie, Livin_in_the_shadow, Sir_Michael, Ledi, and (*Dranzer*). Sorry Guys

If you find my comments rude, well deal with it. Muhahahaha!

Twizzler0171
"The Dawn of a new Night"

This one made sense and I actually quite liked it. Good job.

Kalathalan
"Elegant Radiance"

To me, this seems like a safe subtext. It seemed like one of those "Oh it's so nicely worded, lets let him pass!". But it does match the set so I'll give you that.

Amarise
"Fading Glory"

Makes sense but I guess you could only understand it in one perspective. That the sun was woderful until it set. How poetic.

JellyFish72
"Turning everything it touches to gold..."

I don't like this subtext. It doesn't even match the set besides the colour, and to make the statement at least half true, the text would have to be of the gold colour. But I believe it isn't. And the "..." wasn't even needed. Makes it seem like you wanted to add a dramatic effect to this subtext.

Livin_in_the_shadow
"A grave for the blaze, how radiant!"

I don't understand how you pulled this subtext out of your mind. It's too long, and for a dramatic set, it's amusing. Amusing isn't somethig to be proud of for a nice, simple set like this. Perhaps "A grave for the blaze" would've worked by itself but no, you didn't use it.

.:Requiem:.
"Fire bathes the Western skies"

I like this subtext because it seemed you knew where the sun actually set. Not in the East ladies and gentlemen.

Watericesage
"Crimson Evening"

Ah, another safe subtext. It's not awesome, it's not horrible. It's a pass.

(*Dranzer*)
"The end of the beginning..."

Two words, too dramatic. There's something called dramatic, than there's something called too dramatic. It sounds as if your preaching the apocalypse.

Maryann
"Sleeping Beauty"

Were you thinking of an idea and your gaze suddenly stumbled upon a Disney movie? Doesn't really add anything to the set.

Sir_Michael
"A Sun's Bedtime"

Aw, is that your next children's novel? This isn't a serious subtext at all. It's more like you made a subtext so a five year old could use it. Doesn't fit the set in the more elegant way.

Ledi
"As sets the sun... ...so rises the moon."

I'm iffy on this one. It's not good, it's not bad. Borderline subtext.

Maniac
"Red clouds at night ... my delight"

At night, the clouds aren't red. This is the transitional point into night, therefore your subtext is stating false information.

Stephanie
"A new day has come"

This subtext doesn't even make sense. A new day can't come when the night has just begun.

Twinkle
"Such a perfect way to end a day..."

Don't use words like "Such" or "So". It'll ruin the mood. It would've been a nice subtext if it was just "A perfect way to end the day" (Noticed I replaced 'a' with 'the'). This subtext is borderline because of the word "such".

Lionheartwitty
"Dawn of the night"

I like it. I believe this may be one of the best subtexts of this bunch.

DM was on fire!
"Sunny Days"

Sunny days UNTIL the sunset. Did you miss the big bold letters on the set? The sun is setting, and even though it may be a little shine leaking through the clouds, it's not really sunny.

Hellyer
"*fade in* Light Defraction? *fade out* *fade in* I just call it a sun set! *fade out* *repeat*"

I can tell you did research for this subject. I give you kudos for that. As for the subtext, it's too silly for this set. But in a way, it can work. Borderline subtext.

The_dog_god
"Blazing Beauty"

It's a nice subtext. I like how you captured the sunset's attributes with two simple words.

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I choose to eliminate JellyFish72, Livin_in_the_shadow, (*Dranzer*), Maryann and Stephanie.

Meh, I'm gonna be knocked out this round, aren't I? >.<;;

Well, I guess it is the first time I've done subtexts... most of my sigs don't have 'em.

...bleh.

Ditto for me!

I knew mine was to kiddy, what was I thinking? But at least my subtext isn't as kiddy as,

Nighty Night, Mr. Sun

I love "Nighty Night, Mr. Sun."

General Comments: In all, I think this was a really good round! You guys did a great job as a whole, keep up the good work. I'll be giving everyone a number rating as well as an oral rating, because I understand sometimes some of the terms I use can be confusing. Anyway... onto the ratings.

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Twizzler0171 - The Dawn of a New Night

I like it. Basically, it describes a sunset in a nutshell. Also, since there is a lot of empty space in this set, the length is perfect. 7/10

Kalathalan - Elegant Radiance

Very nice... the usual point of a subtext is to describe or say something involving the main image. You captured that very well here. However, this barely counts for anything, but I think it's a bit too short. 8/10

Amarise - Fading Glory

I like it. Basically, it just resays the main text in an adjective-friendly way, which is a good way to go if you can't think of anything else to say about the sunsetting. 8/10

JellyFish72 - Turning everything it touches to gold...

Well, this does describe a sunset. But unfortunately, it does not describe the main image. In a subtext, it's the best idea to say something more about the image than just the main text, and this really does not. 6/10

Livin_in_the_shadow - A grave for the blaze, how radiant!

Like another judge said, either parts before and after the comma would have worked, but together it just doesn't look right. Also as another judge said, the sig is dramatic, and this subtext is just too amusing to fit well. A bit too long, as well. 5/10

.:Requiem:. - Fire bathes the Western skies

I'm going to have to disagree with my fellow judges here. Yes, it is a nice subtext, but it still doesn't really describe the main image, just a sunset itself. That's kind of like me taking a picture of a strawberry, putting the main text "Nature's Red Fruit" on it, and in the subtext I'd describe a pomegranate. 6.8/10

Watericesage - Crimson Evening

I like it. It describes the image and the surroundings very well, while still relating decently enough to the main text. 7/10

(*Dranzer*) - The end of the beginning...

This one doesn't wow me. The length is decent, though possibly a bit too long. And once again, this describes more of the main text than the image. However, in this paticular case, I'll let it pass. Like Hellyer said, it's a bit too dramatic as well. All in all, it's okay, but could have been better. 6/10

Maryann - Sleeping Beauty

I'm not really feeling this one. At the time of the image, the sun isn't really "sleeping" yet. More like tucking into bed. Though an overused adjective, the use of "beauty" in this case is a good attempt at renaming the sun, it's just not the best adjective to use. 5/10

Sir_Michael - A Sun's Bedtime

Once again, it describes the main text more than the image itself. Plus, this set is somewhat dramatic, and this, I'm sorry to say, reminds me of how some sort of movie for toddlers would describe a sunset. 5/10

Ledi - As sets the sun... ...so rises the moon.

Meh, not my favorite. For one, there is no moon in the original image. Therefore, there is no reason why there should be a moon in the subtext. Again, you don't comment about a pomegranate if a strawberry is the main image. 5/10

Maniac - Red clouds at night ... my delight

Like Robert (or someone else, I have a horrible memory :-P) said, I like the subtext itself. However, once AGAIN, it only describes a sunset itself. From what I can see, there is barely, if any, any red on this signature. I think you've already read the strawberry-pomegranate story, so we can skip that for now. 6/10

Stephanie - A new day has come

Looks like somebody mixed up sunsets and sunrises. xP... however, I'm sure you're already rather humiliated about that, so I won't dwell on it much longer. Actually, though, this subtext could work very well if you just changed a few words to fit a sunset. However, I still do have to take off for this not being usable for the sig, though I think it could work if given a few more seconds of your time. I'm really sorry, Stephanie- 2/10.

Twinkle - Such a perfect way to end a day...

Wheeee, rhyming! I think this is one of my favorites this round. It has a bit of word play with the rhyming, but still comes up to scratch on being dramatic enough to work. It has a nice length, and all in all, I really like it. 8.5/10

Lionheartwitty - Dawn of the night

This is nearly an exact copy of Twizzler's subtext, so it doesn't impress me. Otherwise, since it's nearly exactly the same, Twizzler's ratings should work for you: I like it. Basically, it describes a sunset in a nutshell. Also, since there is a lot of empty space in this set, the length is perfect. However, I'm bringing it from a 7/10 to a 6/10 for copying. 6/10

(And yes, I will go back and make sure it was Twizzler that posted first, and if it wasn't, please accept my FULL apologies.)

DM was on fire! - Sunny Days

This doesn't suit the main text or the image. Like Ammer said, the sun is shining UNTIL what we see in the set. 4/10

Hellyer - *fade in* Light Defraction? *fade out* *fade in* I just call it a sun set! *fade out* *repeat*.

HAH. That's awesome, Hellyer, it really is. However, meh, it's a bit too humorous for this set. But verrrry original, humorous, and it's so awesome I'm only taking one point off for not being dramatic enough. My absolute favorite this round. 9/10

The_dog_god - Blazing Beauty

Kinda short, but it's okay. It describes the image and main text nicely enough. 7/10

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ELIMINATIONS

Stephanie, DM was on fire!, Jellyfish72, Maniac, Dranzer

Twizzler0171 Oooh I like, kind of a play on words or meanings or something like that! meh can't think of what I wanted to say but yep it goes well with the image. It seems a nice size for the signature too and I could easily see this subtext on there.

Kalathalan I love the word 'radiance' it conjures up all kinds of images in my head and I feel that it works well with the signature, mix it with elegant and its a great subtext. You summed it all up in the minimum of words, which is what I like to see!

Amarise Short and sweet! I do love short subtexts and you sum up the whole image in just two words, one of my favourites, good job!

JellyFish72 I can see where you are coming from with this, when the sun is setting it does seem to turn everything to gold. However, that really isn't shown that much in the image you were given. On a slightly different signature you could easily use this but I just don't feel that it works all that well with this one.

Livin_in_the_shadow It just doesn't work for me, sorry. Like has been said before, 'A grave for the blaze' would have been much better, the rest is just unnecessary and detracts from the statement you are trying to make. I particularly feel that when you are trying to think of a subtext, less is definitely more, try and get your point across in as few words as possible.

.:Requiem:. I'm not over keen on this one, how do you know it was in the 'western skies' and even if it was it just seems a little unnecessary to put that in. It really makes no difference whether it was in the east or west to the viewer. I did like the beginning though, 'Fire bathes' but feel that it would have worked better with either 'Fire Bathes the sky' or 'Fire Bathes the night sky'.

Watericesage Its not actually crimson though is it?! It's a nice thought but you are trying to bring something in to it that just isn't there. With a different set this would have been lovely but unfortunately it doesn't fit the signature that you were given. You were the only person to use 'Evening' though and that does fit the set better than 'night' so kudos for that!

(*Dranzer*) I think you tried a little too hard to come up with something that would stand out. So congratulations for not sticking with the norm but, sadly, it really doesn't work. I'm not entirely convinced it even makes sense, 'the end of the beginning' it just sounds wrong to me.

Maryann *is now singing Hi Ho, its off to work we go* It really doesn't work, the first thing I thought of was Disney. Although there really is nothing wrong with the words you chose, you really have to think of what readers will think of, given those words and they are more likely to imagine a girl with 7 dwarves than a sunset.

Sir_Michael 'Bedtime' is just the wrong word, its a very childlike word and takes away from the image. I definitely couldn’t see this working on this particular signature.

Ledi There is nothing particularly wrong with this, it just doesn't feel right to me. It sounds very poetic and would look lovely on a different image but it doesn't fit in with the image given.

Maniac Ahh this rings a bell.."Red sky at night, shepherds delight. Red sky at morning, Shepherds warning" But it doesn't actually look very red to me, more golden, bronzey orangey colours. meh maybe I'm colour blind..

Stephanie The sun is going the wrong way for this to work. That would be lovely if it was a picture of a sunrise, but as a sunset it is very contradictory with the main text.

Twinkle Oooh lovely, really works with the image. I agree with Ammer though, get rid of 'such' it also has a rhyming thing going on which adds a little more I think.

Lionheartwitty A nice simple subtext that works really well with the image.

DM was on fire! It is evening not day time so this doesn't work for me. If it was a sunrise then yes this would be fine, but as it is a sunset you really need to keep that in mind when thinking up a subtext.

Hellyer It doesn't work for me I'm sorry. You are trying to add too much to a relatively plain set, you need a simple subtext that would enhance the image rather than take away from it.

The_dog_god Lovely! I really like this one, again you have summed up the image in just two words. Another one of my favourites.

Sorry guys I hate having to vote people off before I have had a chance to see what else you can come up with:(
Eliminate:

(*Dranzer*)
Maryann
Sir_Michael
Stephanie
DM was on fire!

Gotta love the language filters. 'Hi smurf' keeps going around in my head now.

I didn't even notice that! The filters have rewritten Disney... I always knew there was something strange about Disney..

I'm rather surprised no one used "evening".
Hum, it kinda looks crimson on my screen.. =\