I'd like to run this past you before I continue with it, since I'm not sure if it's a good enough idea to get published. The basic idea is a story written using subtle rhymes. Warning: It's unedited and probably stinks, but I'd still like to hear what you think.
Be as harsh as you need to be!
EDIT: Now finished. No one?
Maybe I should scrap it.
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/37007793/
Notes: The rhyming part only starts when you reach the first page of the book.
Do not take your usual journey of missed opportunity and narrowness, for you can make yourself unwanted and already dead. Better you brace yourself, give thanks for what you have and what is to be won, and WAKE UP AND LIVE. -Taken from Resolve, by Leo