Wed Aug 18, 2004 8:34 pm
Task 3 is now up 
Wed Aug 18, 2004 8:55 pm
Ammer- can I just PM my poem to you? I don't feel comfortable posting my private works right out in the open, where everybody can read or steal them.
EDIT: Actually, I may have to quit because of this task- I just realized how uncomfortable I am with this task, because of the amount of people that need to read my poetry. Sorry, but I can't give people the opportunity to plagerize. Even if I PM it to, all of the judges will have to read it. And I do not know and trust any of them well enough to allow them access. No offence, but I take my poetry very seriously. Can I just not participate in this task without being fired for not doing it because of this reason?
EDIT: Actually, I may have to quit because of this task- I just realized how uncomfortable I am with this task, because of the amount of people that need to read my poetry. Sorry, but I can't give people the opportunity to plagerize. Even if I PM it to, all of the judges will have to read it. And I do not know and trust any of them well enough to allow them access. No offence, but I take my poetry very seriously. Can I just not participate in this task without being fired for not doing it because of this reason?
Wed Aug 18, 2004 9:33 pm
Dawn2 wrote:Ammer- can I just PM my poem to you? I don't feel comfortable posting my private works right out in the open, where everybody can read or steal them.
EDIT: Actually, I may have to quit because of this task- I just realized how uncomfortable I am with this task, because of the amount of people that need to read my poetry. Sorry, but I can't give people the opportunity to plagerize. Even if I PM it to, all of the judges will have to read it. And I do not know and trust any of them well enough to allow them access. No offence, but I take my poetry very seriously. Can I just not participate in this task without being fired for not doing it because of this reason?
I understand. If you do send the Poem to me, I will not let any of the Judges see but if you feel uncomfortable with this task you don't have to do it. However I will have to setup another Task for you, please give me an hour or so. I will post it on the front page.
Wed Aug 18, 2004 10:00 pm
I am going to PM mine to you.
Wed Aug 18, 2004 10:04 pm
Oh, thank you very much, Ammer.
Wed Aug 18, 2004 11:42 pm
Er... shall we all just PM the poems, then, or would you prefer I post mine here, Ammer? Either way is fine with me. My poetry isn't good enough to plagerize, lol.
Thu Aug 19, 2004 2:06 am
Johnnydontgo wrote:Er... shall we all just PM the poems, then, or would you prefer I post mine here, Ammer? Either way is fine with me. My poetry isn't good enough to plagerize, lol.
To make it less hectic for me, please post here. If you PM the task to me, I will not show the other Judges because I understand you want it confedential.
Thu Aug 19, 2004 2:14 am
Ammer wrote:Johnnydontgo wrote:Er... shall we all just PM the poems, then, or would you prefer I post mine here, Ammer? Either way is fine with me. My poetry isn't good enough to plagerize, lol.
To make it less hectic for me, please post here. If you PM the task to me, I will not show the other Judges because I understand you want it confedential.
I PMed mine to you. You can show the other judges, but I didn't want to post it here because anyone can see this post.
Thu Aug 19, 2004 10:46 pm
Zega wrote:Ammer wrote:Johnnydontgo wrote:Er... shall we all just PM the poems, then, or would you prefer I post mine here, Ammer? Either way is fine with me. My poetry isn't good enough to plagerize, lol.
To make it less hectic for me, please post here. If you PM the task to me, I will not show the other Judges because I understand you want it confedential.
I PMed mine to you. You can show the other judges, but I didn't want to post it here because anyone can see this post.
Same here. I don't mind the judges seeing it, but it just... feels weird... to post it here.
Thu Aug 19, 2004 11:11 pm
Alright, I'll be the big man and post mine on the thread first. Here goes.
Redesigning Man.
With abstract visions of mercy,
the redesignation of natural precision
as only God knows how.
Whispers and curves holding
impact like the first boom
of a hurricane
that makes you stop to savour the
innocence of a beginning
the profoundness of a dark ocean
seething with mouthfulls of rythym
and harmony.
Saturating ourselves with awe and anguish,
our home away from, well. You know.
No angles, no points of reference
could define the subtle texture
of a pleasant conversation.
After all is said that can be expressed,
we languish only in vision until
that itself dissolves,
life ebbing with the come of
next morn's tide.
okay. I'm done.
Redesigning Man.
With abstract visions of mercy,
the redesignation of natural precision
as only God knows how.
Whispers and curves holding
impact like the first boom
of a hurricane
that makes you stop to savour the
innocence of a beginning
the profoundness of a dark ocean
seething with mouthfulls of rythym
and harmony.
Saturating ourselves with awe and anguish,
our home away from, well. You know.
No angles, no points of reference
could define the subtle texture
of a pleasant conversation.
After all is said that can be expressed,
we languish only in vision until
that itself dissolves,
life ebbing with the come of
next morn's tide.
okay. I'm done.
Thu Aug 19, 2004 11:32 pm
I'm not exactly sure if this is right but here goes...
Looking For a Friend
All I'm doing
is looking for a friend
to share my secrets with
to be there till the end
To give me a hug
to brush away the tears
and to bring light
to those dark places filled with fear
To laugh and to cry with
someone to walk beside
to share my hobbies
and to trust and confide in
All I'm doing
is looking for a friend
may I ask,
Will you be my friend?
Looking For a Friend
All I'm doing
is looking for a friend
to share my secrets with
to be there till the end
To give me a hug
to brush away the tears
and to bring light
to those dark places filled with fear
To laugh and to cry with
someone to walk beside
to share my hobbies
and to trust and confide in
All I'm doing
is looking for a friend
may I ask,
Will you be my friend?
Fri Aug 20, 2004 12:17 am
This is my first real attempt at poetry, but I did my best.
Concerning Poetry Writing
The images I see flickering before me,
Ephemeral like a lily,
Colorful and noisy, disturb my thoughts.
A poem I must write, in a form called
Free verse. This noise distracts me;
How can I write if "Monster's, Inc." I hear?
Withdrawing to a quiet place, I ponder my task.
My forte is music;
Poetry rings no bells in my heart,
Yet I must write, or risk a boardroom!
With difficulty, pen goes to paper, and words appear.
Slowly at first, but inspiration strikes!
When finished, my poem I review:
Does it flow,
Does it use proper grammar,
Does it mean something to me?
Sighing, the paper I crumple in my hand,
Starting over means defeat!
But bravely I continue, until finally I smile,
For lying before me, is the poem before you!
Concerning Poetry Writing
The images I see flickering before me,
Ephemeral like a lily,
Colorful and noisy, disturb my thoughts.
A poem I must write, in a form called
Free verse. This noise distracts me;
How can I write if "Monster's, Inc." I hear?
Withdrawing to a quiet place, I ponder my task.
My forte is music;
Poetry rings no bells in my heart,
Yet I must write, or risk a boardroom!
With difficulty, pen goes to paper, and words appear.
Slowly at first, but inspiration strikes!
When finished, my poem I review:
Does it flow,
Does it use proper grammar,
Does it mean something to me?
Sighing, the paper I crumple in my hand,
Starting over means defeat!
But bravely I continue, until finally I smile,
For lying before me, is the poem before you!
Fri Aug 20, 2004 5:49 am
New day, New Beginning
The last shining star, a bright light
Blinds of confinement spread apart
A sharp pain interrupting my sight
A toss and a turn
A yawn and a stretch
Rising for the stars
Everything is now clear
A new beginning
A clean start
A blinding tree
Shadows my light
A close of a blind
I change into something new
A metamorphosis
Is what I have become
---
I suxors at poems >_<.
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The last shining star, a bright light
Blinds of confinement spread apart
A sharp pain interrupting my sight
A toss and a turn
A yawn and a stretch
Rising for the stars
Everything is now clear
A new beginning
A clean start
A blinding tree
Shadows my light
A close of a blind
I change into something new
A metamorphosis
Is what I have become
---
I suxors at poems >_<.
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Fri Aug 20, 2004 6:26 am
God, I have been trying to write a decent poem all since this task has been up. Out of my three finalists this would be my pick, and that just shows you how crappy the rest must have been.
Soccer Penalty
As I fall to the ground
The referee blows his whistle
And everyone looks around.
What is the decision?
That is the question on everyone’s mind.
As the referee points to the spot
All eyes turn to me.
A cold rush of nervousness
Makes its way through my body.
I am pumped and I am ready
To take the responsibility
It is my job to score and that is what I'll do,
As I line up the ball
And focus on the goal.
For this moment alone, nothing else matters.
Left, right? Top, bottom? What will it be?
As I make my decision I step up to the spot.
Suddenly I panic, I almost lose my nerve
But I manage to play it cool.
As the ball swishes against the net,
I turn to celebrate with my team.
Now I hope my grammar is correct here, I am not sure whether there should be a capital at the begining of each line. Anyway, good luck to all.
Soccer Penalty
As I fall to the ground
The referee blows his whistle
And everyone looks around.
What is the decision?
That is the question on everyone’s mind.
As the referee points to the spot
All eyes turn to me.
A cold rush of nervousness
Makes its way through my body.
I am pumped and I am ready
To take the responsibility
It is my job to score and that is what I'll do,
As I line up the ball
And focus on the goal.
For this moment alone, nothing else matters.
Left, right? Top, bottom? What will it be?
As I make my decision I step up to the spot.
Suddenly I panic, I almost lose my nerve
But I manage to play it cool.
As the ball swishes against the net,
I turn to celebrate with my team.
Now I hope my grammar is correct here, I am not sure whether there should be a capital at the begining of each line. Anyway, good luck to all.
Fri Aug 20, 2004 4:47 pm
Ok... here's my entry.
It's a new version of the Sorting Hat's song from the Harry Potter books.
Sit down so I can tell you
A story old as time
About four brillant wizards
Who never passed their prime
First we have Old Gryffindor
Who's courage he wore proud
'To educate young wizards!'
Was the goal, he said aloud.
Next was Humble Hufflepuff
Her loyalty shone through
'To make them better students!'
Is what her house would do.
Thirdly, Wise Old Ravenclaw
Of fair Eagle's descent
'Only the smartest can reside here!'
Is truely what he meant
Last is cunning Slytherin
Who knew well who to choose
'Only pick the worthy!
Or wizards sure shall lose!'
Together they worked greatly
To build this school, you see
Until one fateful day
When four dropped down to three
Old Salazar, he departed
Leaving the others in the dust
But never did they step down
The school lives on, it must
A legend has been told here
Of Salazar's old plan
To rid the race of mudbloods
And bring back his old clan
But never fear young students!
This tale is just a myth
So go about your duties
There's no need for a riff
So put me on your heads, you see
And I'll tell you where you're at
I'm bound to tell you where to go
For I'm Hogwarts Sorting Hat!
It's a new version of the Sorting Hat's song from the Harry Potter books.
Sit down so I can tell you
A story old as time
About four brillant wizards
Who never passed their prime
First we have Old Gryffindor
Who's courage he wore proud
'To educate young wizards!'
Was the goal, he said aloud.
Next was Humble Hufflepuff
Her loyalty shone through
'To make them better students!'
Is what her house would do.
Thirdly, Wise Old Ravenclaw
Of fair Eagle's descent
'Only the smartest can reside here!'
Is truely what he meant
Last is cunning Slytherin
Who knew well who to choose
'Only pick the worthy!
Or wizards sure shall lose!'
Together they worked greatly
To build this school, you see
Until one fateful day
When four dropped down to three
Old Salazar, he departed
Leaving the others in the dust
But never did they step down
The school lives on, it must
A legend has been told here
Of Salazar's old plan
To rid the race of mudbloods
And bring back his old clan
But never fear young students!
This tale is just a myth
So go about your duties
There's no need for a riff
So put me on your heads, you see
And I'll tell you where you're at
I'm bound to tell you where to go
For I'm Hogwarts Sorting Hat!