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 Post subject: The poem I just wrote... Do you like it?
PostPosted: Fri Jan 07, 2005 10:48 pm 
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I got the idea for this last night...

You don't know me.

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You don’t know me.
Why must you insist you know me better?
Why don’t you take my word?

You don’t know me.
Why do you feel that you must decide my life?
Why do you want me to be helpless?

You don’t know me.
If I tell you the truth, you don’t believe me.
Why should I try?

You don’t know me.
Why do you complain?
You’re the one with the perfect life, not me.

You don’t know me.
Stop trying to make me feel insecure.
Stop trying to make me lose.

You don’t know me.
Stop spreading lies so you feel better about yourself.
It won’t make people like you.

You don’t know me.
Why must you say the things you do?
Not only to me, but to others.

You don’t know me.
Please, stop acting like you do.
You don’t know me.


Well?? Is it any good?


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PostPosted: Fri Jan 07, 2005 10:55 pm 
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Mmmm....not bad..

Something about seems a little...wierd...to me. But that's probably just me being dumb

Very nice work!


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PostPosted: Sun Jan 09, 2005 10:45 pm 
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Wow, it's quite good^_^ It's almost like a free-style, but then, not quite XD heh.

The 'You Don't Know Me' gets a slight bit repetitive, but maybe that's me. I don't normally do much repeating in my poems, though sometimes and the beginning and end. It's a different style from mine, that's for sure^__^

Still quite nice, though. Very direct^^*


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