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Welcome to The Greatest Story Ever Told, our aim is to find the Greatest story teller on PPT... Only one can win the grand prize of 100,000np!


Contestants will have to compete in Chapters. Each chapter will have guidelines about what your story should include, sometimes these will be very detailed and other times most of it will be left entirely up to the individual. Any requirements given must be followed or the story will not be accepted, where ever possible you will receive a pm telling you of this.

Each chapter will last approximately 1 week, 5 days to write and 2 days for reviewing, this is subject to change though.

Example of a chapter:



This is just an example, actual chapters will vary so as to cover as many different types and styles of writing as possible. There are also a couple of twists planned, consider yourself warned!:P

Critics will then comment and offer advice/constructive critisism on your story and rate it from 1 - 10. Depending on how many people enter the person/people who rated the least will be out of the contest until there is only one winner!

Critics will PM their reviews to me and I will combine and post them. Hopefully this will ensure we get honest and unbiased reviews, although I have complete faith in the critics!:)

As a bonus, the person with the highest rating in each chapter will get their story published in the next edition of pink ink!:)

Rules: (its mostly common sense!)
Please read carefully
Stories must include all of the requirements.
All normal forum rules apply. All stories must be suitable for all ages, anything that is offensive or inappropriate will not be accepted and if necessary reported.
Please do not give negative comments on other peoples writing.
Only people participating in the contest should post, otherwise it gets too cluttered.
You may use one of your older pieces if you want to, as long as it fits the rounds requirements.
All stories must be your own work, do not steal someone elses work.

Chapters:




Old Chapters:



You can find all stories submitted this chapter here: http://www.pinkpt.com/forum/viewtopic.p ... 5&start=34

Watericesage wrote the best rated story this chapter, look out for it in the next edition of the pink ink! Wind was eliminated


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You can see all stories for the Second Chapter here: http://www.pinkpt.com/forum/viewtopic.p ... &start=113
Twizzler0171 wrote the highest rated story this chapter, look out for it in the next edition of the Pink Ink!
Both Wind and Sock received warnings.
No one was eliminated - For the last time I PROMISE!:P


You can see all of the stories for chapter one here: http://www.pinkpt.com/forum/viewtopic.p ... c&start=66

Lillie's story was the highest rated, look out for it in the Pink Ink.
Hellyer received a warning.
No one was eliminated.



Contestants:
Anyone is welcome to enter, all contestants will be put here!
Post on the thread if you wish to participate.
Twizzler0171
Jasujo Did not submit, Chapter two.
jabond102 Did not submit, Chapter two.
Kugetsu Withdrew, Chapter one.
Shrew Did not submit, Chapter two.
Kurisutaru
.:Requiem:. Failed to complete, Chapter two.
sirclucky Withdrew, Chapter one.
Sock
watericesage
Lillie
Urthdigger Withdrew, Chapter two.
maniac Did not submit, Chapter two.
Silja Withdrew, Chapter one.
Matt Withdrew, Chapter three.
Wind
Stephanie Withdrew, Chapter one.
hellyer Withdrew, Chapter two

Critics
No more pms please I have enough critics now!
o_0
warxelo
livin_in_the_shadow
everconfused
Qanda

Before I get started I would just like to say again, thank you for taking the time to write such great stories. I know it is hard to write a story when given requirements and a deadline, especially if it is a genre you are unused to. The general mood with the critics is that you have all improved to some extent and we have all greatly enjoyed reading your stories.

Also, to .:requiem:. and Jabond, I liked both of your stories and would have loved to be able to include them in this chapter. Unfortunately though that wasn't possible, however I really hope I will see you two when I start TGSET * 2!:P

Reviews and Ratings

livin_in_the_shadow was unable to rate and review this chapter but he will be back for the next chapter!:)

Council of the Night - Matt
We mainly seem to agree that you have a natural talent for writing and your descriptions were very clear and added a definate mood to the story. However, some of us felt that the idea of a ghost killing a dog was not so much scary as rather distasteful. Having said that though your ending was alot better than the last chapter and we were impressed with that.

We liked: Your descriptions and the ending.
You should work on: Thinking about who will be reading your stories and try not to offend the readers.

Ratings:
everconfused - 2/10
Qanda - 8/10
o_0 - 8/10
warxelo - 9/10
xjox - 8/10
Total - 35/50

One Must Die - Lillie
We all seem to agree that this was a very good story, you kept our suspense about who was going to 'win' until right to the very end. Some of the dialogue was a little confusing though and we had to think about who was talking, but apart from that it was very well written.

We liked: The idea, it was very good and well written. The way you kept us in suspense and built up the atmosphere.
You should work on: Making the dialogue clearer.

Ratings:
everconfused - 8/10
Qanda - 8/10
o_0 - 10/10
warxelo - 8/10
xjox - 8/10
Total - 42/50

Hunted down - Wind
We are a little divided on your story, while some of us liked your ending and the little twist you added by not having your character die. Some of us felt that it was a bit of a let down (the more eviler of us I should say!) and left the story open. We are all in agreement thought that it was really well written though.
Jo note: Your main character seemed to be human. While the headless horseman was definately non human, he was more of a secondary character as the story was written from the human characters perspective. Tut tut for not following the requirements

We liked: Your writing, it was laid out really well and very descriptive. That you took an old story and gave it a new twist.
You should work on: Your endings, for some it was a little anti-climatic.

Ratings: You are docked 1 point from each judge for failing to fulfil one requirement.
everconfused - 8.5/10
Qanda - 8.5/10
o_0 - 5/10
warxelo - 5/10
xjox - 7/10
Total - 34/50

Dream Horror - Kurisutaru
We all enjoyed your story and felt particularly that the first part was really well written. However, the ending was a little disappointing and could have done with a bit more time spent on it. It seemed, to some of us, to be rather hurried and slightly predictable. Perhaps try to add a couple more twists next time!

We liked: The beginning you spent alot of time drawing us into the story and we got to know a little more about the character. Your writing was really good and you used nice description.
You should work on: Your endings, I've already said this before but I'll say it again; it really is the last impression the reader gets of your story, it's what we remember most.

Ratings:
everconfused - 9.5/10
Qanda - 7.5/10
o_0 8/10
warxelo 9/10
xjox - 8/10
Total - 42/50

Twizzler0171 - Coyote
We all enjoyed your story, particularly the Indian Aspect. Your writing was very detailed and well thought out. However, the ending could have been a little better some of us thought, with a little more explanation into the relationship of the two coyotes.
We liked: Your story as a whole, it stood out to us. Your writing was very clear and well written.
You should work on: Your ending, some of us felt it was a little predictable and left a couple of questions unanswered.

Ratings:
everconfused - 10/10
Qanda - 8/10
o_0 - 8/10
warxelo - 10/10
xjox - 9/10
Total - 45/50

Thomas - Sock
We all felt that this was a really promising story but it was hurried and therefore lacked a little in description. The main thing we would have liked to know more about was why Thomas turned into a wolf and about his relationship (if any) with Sandra, why did he target her? What you did write was very good and you show real talent in writing in this genre, it was very spooky to alot of the critics!
Jo Note: You didn't reach the minimum words needed to fulfil all of the requirements, tsk tsk slap on the wrists!:P
We liked: The spookiness! You scared quite a few of us The storyline, it showed real promise.
You should work on: Obviously spending more time on it. Also, building up the characters a little more, we didn't actually get to know Thomas and Sandra.

Ratings: You are docked 1 point from each judge for failing to fulfil one requirement.
everconfused - 7.5/10
Qanda - 6.5/10
o_0 - 6/10
warxelo - 7/10
xjox - 7/10
Total - 34/50

Quarrels - Watericesage
The neopian theme was a nice touch again. But most of the critics found your story to be a little confusing, you changed tense rather alot, sometimes in the middle of a sentence. The ending was also a little unclear about what actually happened to sally.

We liked: The ideas, you put a lot of thought into the story and it was an original idea.
You should work on: Choose a tense and stick to it!:P Also, try and make sure your story is clear to the reader.

Ratings:
everconfused - 7/10
Qanda - 5/10
o_0 - 8/10
warxelo - 9/10
xjox - 7/10
Total - 37/50

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Which means that by my calculations we have a tie for elimination.
Sock and Wind both rated 34/50

Ordinarily I would pm all of the critics and ask for them to vote on who to eliminate, unfortunately I am going on holiday in a few hours and won't be back until Friday evening.

Which leaves me with 2 choices, I can either eliminate both of you or keep both of you. Being the nice person that I am I have chosen to keep both of you. (this has nothing to do with the fact that contestants are dropping like flies *shifty eyes*)


This chapters highest rated story was by Twizzler0171, your story will be in the next issue of the Pink Ink, congratulations!

Expect the new chapter in a short while. Thanks again guys you all did a great job

! Cant wait!

Anyone who did not complete the task would be elimanted - points to myself.

I want to thank the judges again for reviewing my story. I appreciate the advice and I'm hoping to work on my endings. I'm also glad that I didn't do as poorly as I thought I would. I don't usually write anything like that so it was a stretch for me. Thanks Judges for reviewing the stories!

Yeah, I gotta admit, I screwed up the tenses...

It was supposed to be:
Beginning: Present Tense
Flashback thingy: Past Tense
Speech: Present Tense
End: Present Tense

Anywho, I'd like to thank all the judges for reading my story!

Oh, and before I forget, congrats to Twizzler for getting in the Pink Ink!

Chapter three is now up! Check the front page.

You have until Friday the 11th of March to submit your stories, which gives you longer to write it!:)

Also please make sure to pm me your stories instead of posting on the board, I just want to see how that works out!

If you have any questions I will try and check the board before I leave and answer them, otherwise I won't be back until this friday (the 4th). You can always pm one of the judges though and I'm sure they will be happy to give their opinion.

Good luck everyone!:)

I almost forgot to say this...

Congrats Twiz!! Excellent work!

Congratulations Twizzler! You did very well indeed. ^_^

Thank you again for the critique, judges. And yay, Jo is such a nice person we get to keep two of our contestants.

Edit: I completely forgot to say: I hope you have a great holiday, Jo!

Yes, Jo, you are so nice.

Thank you everyone. I really did not expect to win this round... I kinda had a hurried ending because I wasn't even close that day, and so had to hurry it up, alot.

O'kome does really mean Coyote in Indian... in Apache, I believe, but no quoting me on that one, okay!

Oh, and this one is going to be hard for me... unlike the others, I don't get an automatic poppy-uppy telling me a plot...

JO! THANK YOU! I LOVE YOU! -attacks with big glompy hugs-

I really thought I was going to be eliminated because of not being able to finish.

Now fantasy...wheeee.

Congrats Twizz for winning, and congrats to Wind and Sock for not getting eliminated. I'm quite glad about that since you two have a lot of potential.

And there was me thinking you would all be mad at me for not eliminating anyone! Maybe I should stay nice and keep not eliminating....

I forgot to say before, that all critics are welcome to post their own personal comments to the contestants again!

~and now I'm off for my holiday...I'll think of you all while I'm relaxing in the spa!~

Uhm... actually, he's not human, you know. It's a bit slight, I admit it, but he comes from a world that is not our own.



See?

Uhm, I didn't get my chapter 2 in. Me bad. Can I still participate in 3?